Question: HOW IS MY WRITING?????????????????????
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Answer #1:
Very catching, once you start reading you want to go all the way through and know what is gonna happen next. well done!Answer #2:
It's ok, sheesh! Calm down with the caps lock and various question marks.Answer #3:
What I noticed right away is that you have very short, choppy sentences. Try to combine them and make them longer.Answer #4:
Awesome! And you used my idea! YAY!!!Answer #5:
maybe... add a little more description about the setting- like describe in depth the deep, echoing halls of the orphanage- or the small, wallpaper smothered ones.maybe describe Kristy's face- maybe a little bit creased from stress, but she had kindness in her face and she welcomed him with open arms, etc, etc.
i like it, it's getting better and better! touch up on a few things, really little things and you'll be good to go.
hope this helps you.
~*muse
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